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In the midst of everything that exists
There also exists a girl.
She does what many others do.
Concentrating too much on what was
And not enough on what is
Or what could be.
And in the process
Forgetting the simple truths
That makes us real, living,
Breathing human beings.
With a soul and a heart
That can reach and touch another.

What can she be named?
That girl, who has ultimately
Forgotten how to love...?
It is more common now than ever
Or so it seems.
At least, in this life.

She has never fallen or stumbled
On any path in life she wearily walked.
Yet, with each step growing more uncertain
She feels as if she's lost a part of herself.
All her beliefs she felt with conviction,
Now mere smokes and mirrors.
Withering into nothing and pumped out as ash
From a chimney of an abandoned home
Where she used to sit alone to collect herself.
Reflecting off everything that confined her
And everyone who ever told her she wasn't.
Never specifying what she couldn't touch.
Just that she didn't have the reach.

The places she had been to
People she spoke to and been lied to (more than likely)
Seemed distant or faded, like old photographs
Of memories vaguely recalled.
All she knew was that there was only one thing that mattered
One simple truth.
The difference between them and herself
Was that they were comfortable.
Comfortable in the lies they told.
The pointless lives they lived.
Ignorant of anything that wasn't right in front of them
And even then--
Even then, never ventured a look.

She might not have been perfect, few seldom are.
But her eyes of polished topaz, cut to a clean finish,
Were wide open.
She saw things that nobody else conceived...
That there was human error that needed to be noticed,
Needed to be corrected.
And there was a beautiful world out there
If one would only lift their head
From whatever self-constructed fantasy they were buried in,
And look.
©2009 *Medoriko
:iconmedoriko:

Author's Comments

I...don't know where this came from to be honest. Little bits and pieces popped into my head and I just WENT with it. Some parts of impatience with humanity...different things :lol: I absolutely adore how it turned out in the end. Ultimately, It is the message that I hope comes through (and it IS open to many interpretations because I read it more than once and got different views). It is also...stemming from a place in myself...and there are some things in the poem itself that reflect my own personal views. Anyway, I hope it is a pleasant read :) ~Thundercunt~

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:icontokyo-angel:
Very nice! I caught one error though, I believe:

"The difference between them and herself
Was that they comfortable."

They were? Something like that...just figured I'd let you know! :heart:

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Smile; it's the second best thing you can do with your lips.

<Ashlings> Kristin doesn't bleed, she's made of anti-woman fibers
<Ashlings> they're flame resistant
:iconmedoriko:
YES. Thank you.FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFF MY BRAIN. *goes to correct immediately* GRRR...anywho 8D! I'm glad you liked :nod: Hope it met the kristin stamp of approval xD

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Medoriko: The Ferocious Bitch <3

~ThunderCunt~
:icontokyo-angel:
:#1: It did indeed.

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Smile; it's the second best thing you can do with your lips.

<Ashlings> Kristin doesn't bleed, she's made of anti-woman fibers
<Ashlings> they're flame resistant
:iconmedoriko:
;D <3

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Medoriko: The Ferocious Bitch <3

~ThunderCunt~
:iconbudukai:
It's good to see you putting up deviations :lol: I think you might have a typo right here
If one would only "life" their head
From whatever self-constructed fantasy they were buried in,
And look.

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God doesn't expect you to be superman :superman:, but occasionally expects you to be smartman :reading:
:iconmedoriko:
damnit. I hate my life. Now I don't like this poem xD; well other than that can i have some criticisms on the CONTENT? lol anybody?

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Medoriko: The Ferocious Bitch <3

~ThunderCunt~
:iconbudukai:
Of course, I thought it was quite nice over all. A bit more encouraging this time I see :D

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God doesn't expect you to be superman :superman:, but occasionally expects you to be smartman :reading:
:iconusedlotofhell:
You're right about it being open to more then one take. I took it to mean to the extent of one of the Youtube videos I linked recently, in that, we are the world today, and we can change it on a whim if we work hard enough. Corruption does not need to be the norm, pollution neither.

I really loved it a lot Nadia. Great job love :D
:iconmedoriko:
:blush: thanks.

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Medoriko: The Ferocious Bitch <3

~ThunderCunt~

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