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He knows that she is fragile
just as surely as he knows that the moon rises at night.
It's what draws him near. Perhaps
what keeps him from letting go.
Running away from what she didn't need.
But held onto anyway.
It was all she had.
Memories broken into pieces like seashells
sprawled onto the sheets of the bed she made.
They say you have to lay in it
So she thinks.
And she does, late at night.
When the moon and sky kiss
In the way she remembered he would kiss her.
Burn her. Hot to the touch
But cold as he drowned her.
These were the memories she held close
Among other treasurers, she'd hoarded them.
Keeping old copper pennies and torn photographs
hoping that one day they would be valuable.
She hopes someday she will be too.
He peeled off her protective layers,one by one.
Grimacing at the effort it took to unravel them.
Crude and jagged letters
spelling out an unprecedented truth.
Because all in all, they are. End over end.
And they can't be
anything else
when they
truly fall.
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I don't know why It took me so long to finish this. I wrote it a month back and have been keeping it until I was totally satisfied with it. Today I changed a few things and BAM, there you go. So yeah, here it is posted to MY satisfaction lol I hope you enjoy. Comments are appreciated.
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!Cosma27 Jun 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hello, and thank you for your submission to ZealZone!

There's not much to say about this poem, only because I can't seem to find anything wrong with it. I love how deep and emotional it is, and the way that you bring the moon back into the poem. Your style is amazing, as well as your word choice, and I hope to see more of your work soon!

Thank you, again, for your beautiful submission. Have a great day, and keep writing!

~Cosma27, Co-Founder
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*Medoriko Jun 26, 2012  Student Writer
:blush: Why thank you! I'm glad you like it so much. I hope to continue to please :#1: have a great day yourself.
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Visuals.... god damn it, visuals. So vivid, so clear, so perfect. Definitely one of your biggest strengths in writing.

The subject matter is moving, and is good too - the fact that she's depressed and he's trying to help her see the light, that she's worth what he says she's worth.

Very well done. I like it quite a bit :)
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*Medoriko Jun 24, 2012  Student Writer
I'm glad you like it :) I got a lot of inspiration for this poem from a bunch of things but I wanted to convey both sides of the story: the side of helplessness and the possibility of hope. It goes both ways: the need for help, the wanting to be help and BE helped but coming back to square one of feeling like it's not worth it (or that you'll never lift off the ground). An endless cycle. But I digress, thanks for commenting.
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