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What I have come to Understand by *Medoriko:iconMedoriko:



Words that don't quite fit
Makes worlds between us
But is not that far
Only a jump
From your world to mine
Could bring us closer
Into something beautiful
Complete
But thats something you don't see

You express what you don't feel
And ask for what you don't want
While I'm all ears
And so willing to give...
Because there's no place
Where you're not
And no place to exist
Where you don't
And I'm sucked in again
Seeing nothing new From you
Even if you promised...

I can only fall back
So many times
Before searching for
Something to look 'forward' to
Some buried treasure
I had missed and yet to find


But people live
Make mistakes
Fall short
And Walk alone
And there's no exception to the rule

Maybe it's not them
Not us
Not a combination of the two
And maybe it was never you
Maybe it was me
Who changed
©2008-2009 *Medoriko
:iconmedoriko:

Author's Comments

There are many things to learn in life...Hope you guys like it :3 I particularly do x3 My creativity and poetic thoughts right here ;D

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:icondemonhellnoire:
I find this a little puzzling to comment on, to be honest. Perhaps it's tiredness from the week, perhaps not. But it seems the last stanza has the narrator blaming themselves for an issue that doesn't seem to be their fault.

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Vampires, Demons, Lust, Love, Immortals, Immorals, and more. Click here to read the stories of Hell Noire and Heaven Blanc fighting for control of this Earth!
:iconblue-moon-maiden:
*feeds your poetic thoughts fresh blood* I always like your poems...so...real.

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Know what I mean Jelly bean?
:iconcoolpat7:
Very nicely done, good job :3

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(playing DnD) "Hold action, hold action, hold action, (raises voice) Barbarian RAGE!" (falls off chair)

"How many ships have they?" "200 sir" "And how many have we?" "50 sir" "Cabin boy, fetch me my brown trousers"-from skit

BRING ON THE ADVENTURE!-
:iconmedoriko:
thanks ;D

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Medoriko: The Ferocious Bitch <3

~ThunderCunt~
:iconmedoriko:
x3 aww thank you chi! I try my best >Ds

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Medoriko: The Ferocious Bitch <3

~ThunderCunt~
:iconmedoriko:
Maybe my poem just sucks? Dunno lol And the last stanza is clearly the narrator blaming his/herself for something. But who's fault is it? Thats up for the individual to decide:3

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Medoriko: The Ferocious Bitch <3

~ThunderCunt~
:icondemonhellnoire:
Sucks isn't part of my commenting vocabulary unless it does vacuuming. :lol: So that isn't it. As for your comments on the last line, that, yes.. of course :lol:

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Vampires, Demons, Lust, Love, Immortals, Immorals, and more. Click here to read the stories of Hell Noire and Heaven Blanc fighting for control of this Earth!
:iconblue-moon-maiden:
Your tries end with good results.

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Know what I mean Jelly bean?
:iconmedoriko:
lol I suppose. If you consider my writing good results lol ><

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Medoriko: The Ferocious Bitch <3

~ThunderCunt~

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